Mālō e lelei Christian, thank you for sharing your writing with us. I can see you have thought carefully about which words to use in your writing. I particularly like: "angry volcano" and "the volcano was hot, big, bright and dangerous". I think I would be very scared if I was near a volcano when it erupted!
Mālō e lelei Christian. Well done on catching up with your learning. I really like the descriptive words you have used. I particularly like 'angry volcano, loud thunder, ash swaying out of the volcano'. I can really picture what you are describing. What word could you use instead of hot?
Malo e lelei Christian, I really enjoyed reading your story about an erupting volcano. It would be really scary if a volcano erupted near us, wouldn't it?!
Mālō e lelei Christian, thank you for sharing your writing with us. I can see you have thought carefully about which words to use in your writing. I particularly like: "angry volcano" and "the volcano was hot, big, bright and dangerous". I think I would be very scared if I was near a volcano when it erupted!
ReplyDeleteMālō e lelei Christian. Well done on catching up with your learning. I really like the descriptive words you have used. I particularly like 'angry volcano, loud thunder, ash swaying out of the volcano'. I can really picture what you are describing. What word could you use instead of hot?
ReplyDeleteMalo e lelei Christian, I really enjoyed reading your story about an erupting volcano. It would be really scary if a volcano erupted near us, wouldn't it?!
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